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Post by hizoku on Apr 20, 2008 2:30:26 GMT -5
Student
Full Name: Hizoku Von Citrique
Race: Well to make things simple... She is an alien. Genetically created. Just read the history.
Element/power: The Element of... SURPRISE!!!
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Weapons: Sniper Rifle. When shes in her alien form...she has Acidy Spit, as I so love to call it. And for those who havent the Alien series... their blood is also acidic, which can melt basically anything.
General Personality: Flirty and very very sexual *pervy smile* Aloof and apathetic. Shes a klutz and she can get along with almost everyone without actually getting along. In other words, shes a good actor. Weird.
Five Likes: Groping. Painting her toe nails. Her computer. The Truth. Hannah Montana.
Five Dislikes: Hates being interrupted. Getting muddy. People who drive and take one hand off the steering wheel. Lies. Naturally, Sadie.
Five Positive Traits: (1) Hizoku was told never to lie, getting experimented on every day of life and asked how she felt and what she thought of this and blah blah blah and tried to lie and well you know they will find out anyways being smart ass scientists they are, so she is quite honest. Thats considered positive right? (2)Since she left she has been almost always happy and positive. She has her bad moments though but yeah shes almost always positive. (3)Hizzy has a great sense of humor. Especially when she`s watching movies. Always making fun of `em. (4 & 5) Hizoku is creative and imaginative....
Five Negative Traits: (1) Hizzy can be quite the sarcastic one (2) and quite rude at some points. (3) A hypocrite she is. Hates lies but yet, but the situation calls for it, she will lie till her heart can burst. (4)She likes politics... xD that basically speaks for itself. (5) Also she is stubborn...
Family:
Mahza: Carolanne.
Fahza: Alex
Siblings Vivian. Though they have never met. They are half sisters.
Brief History: Hizoku was born into a rich family but her parents had given her away to scientists who offered them a large sum of money for her. And well they gave a very good persuasive argument. Hizoku's parents gave her up. Well then the scientists then did was scientists do. They implanted an Aliens DNA within her genes. Before her though, there were other babies who were being experimented on. But most of them all mutated horribly. Some died and most were suffering. All but Hizoku who's transformation was successful.
Some flaws in her mutation was her personality, sever headaches and migraines. Her personality is all messed up and its difficult for her to understand some emotions and her own.
During her short life they continued experimenting and kept her under constant surveillance. They set her in a room full of homeless people and they watched as she massacred the place. White walls were soon painted red.
They taught her the basics. Reading, writing, blah blah blah. They told her what she was and that she can control the changes between her forms. Hizoku is like a... like a shark. Once she smells blood, then basically the transformation cant be stopped. Nothing really changes once shes an her alien form. She cant talk though. Just the hissing and glory of an alien =3.
She attempts a normal life but its kinda hard when your an alien and your occupation is Assassin. So it hasn't been easy for her but hey, she tries. Though a little perverted and sarcastic she is quite the girl to be around. But her history other then that is simple. She grew up in a lab and only until recently was sent from her home and out into the world. Why? Well... why not? She knew responsibility and she knew consequences. Hizoku is a big girl now, she knows how to take care of herself.
On how she came go and join Licander in his mission. Well, it all came down to one thing: Word of Mouth. Someone who had helped taken care of her told someone within the organization and they liked the idea of having someone with her extraordinary powers to help Licander in his mission. But why? Well, it was requested and Hizzy had nothing else to do. Plus she was ready to taste a little of the world.
In her shortish time in her occupation of an assassin, she has required many skills and has done many hits around the world. She was taught by others and did her training. The scientists goal was to create the worlds greatest predator. With the body of a monster and the mind of a human, she will become the container of great glory. Or so says her creators.
Anything Extra: She is currently assisting Licander in wiping out Anslema. She is part of his Organization as well. So there.
Pets: A stuffed animal named Kiba.
Wing color: 
Appearance:
Secret Word: Edited by Silace,* |
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Post by Ayame on Apr 20, 2008 10:14:58 GMT -5
Okay, this seems.... Incomplete.
*just noticed your "will finish later" note* Okay, then, but I'll leave the list up....
• We do need to know her power....
• And her appearance.
• History needs a hell of a lot more to it.
• We already have an assassin, Licander, so I would consider talking to her first on that matter.
• Personality—or rather, the traits and two of the likes/dislikes—seem conflicting and Mary-Sue-ish. If she is an assassin, wouldn't she need to lie rather a lot? And "wise" does not work at all with "arrogant, violent, impulsive," and possibly "perverted."
• Not sure if guns would be allowed here, so I'll leave that to Silace....
• Not really a requirement, but you should spell-check this—there're quite a few misspellings.
• Oh, and the name is just slightly unlikely—it's what, part Japanese, part French? I'd recommend sticking to just one nationality, but I know sometimes people have parents from two different nationalities, so it's just a suggestion....
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Post by hizoku on Apr 20, 2008 15:20:01 GMT -5
Im sorry but I didnt know there was another assassin.
I didnt know she could be alittle different, speaking for her rationallities. The 'Citrique' was taken off of the ingrediants of a Sour Puss bottle.
And I was gonna fix everything up later (as in spell check) when I was actually awake and slightly more sober. So.. yeah sorry...
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Post by S I L A C E on Apr 20, 2008 16:13:34 GMT -5
I understand where you are coming from, Ayay. [Yes, I've picked up on the name xD] But I can also understand where Hizoku is coming.
I have just talked with Hizzy and Li on MSN, and now I understand everything.
About the Assassin thing, well, Li was going to create a charrie to help out Licander in the killing-off-Anslema project. We've decided that Hizoku will be that person. Which covers the assassin part.
With the lie thing, Hizoku could just be a hypocrite and not like being lied to, whilst she lies to everyone else. 'Wise' could be her being wise in other situations, like she can be creatively violent with her killings. It's sort of like 'Jumbo Shrimp' or 'Strangely Natural'. Can't the possibility of Hizoku being bi-polar be present?
Sourpuss explains it all. Licander was saying how she tends to take names from random objects lying around the vicinity. which is explainable, considering even I have difficulty coming up with last names.
Yes, they are. I think a charrie or two here already have guns on them. I know 'Evelyn Matthews' does.
can be answered with:
:3
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Post by Ayame on Apr 23, 2008 16:14:50 GMT -5
Okay, still a few issues here....
Just put "N/A"; the current "filler info" makes it look like "SURPRISE!!!" is actually her power.
Actually, the underlined should be put under the Element/power section.
Okay, great, please add to her history:
• How she came to join his Organization.
• Something about how she managed to become a professional assassin for them.
• How she came to be assigned to help him kill Anslema off.
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Post by S I L A C E on Apr 23, 2008 19:40:58 GMT -5
About the element of surprise, well, I saw the humor in that, so I didn't think of that as being such a big deal...
Did you know that Chuck Norris ripped up the Periodic Table of Elements?
He said it was missing the Element of Surprise.
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As for the Acidy Spit thing, I think this would go under weapons. Some people have 'claws and fangs' in their weapons, so why should Acidy Spit have to be moved?
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About the assassin thing, at first Hizoku wasn't sure she was supposed to write this in here or not, like if her and Licander were keeping it a secret or not. But then I told her it was fine, and just went off and threw that in for her anyway. She was going to go fix it eventually, but I was just tossing it in for reference.
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And yes, Hizoku did make a post before she was accepted. She'd texted me and I told her she could, and I'd accept her next time I had access to a computer, as I didn't find any flaws in the application.
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:3
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Post by hizoku on Apr 23, 2008 20:06:26 GMT -5
There.
Is my bio still flawed?
Or am I done?
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Post by Ayame on Apr 23, 2008 22:13:28 GMT -5
*response to Silace*
(1st thing) Eh, I was just trying to be professional. *shrug*
(2nd thing) Oh, well... I didn't know. XD I should probably actually read over other
(4th thing) And on the matter of the post thing.... I didn't know (again), sorry. >_< XD I seem to be the only one around here who doesn't have any way to contact anyone else IRL. XD
So, everything checks out now. I accept.
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